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Monday 25 May 2015

WHO DUNNIT???

"We're here!!!"Habiba announced as she stepped out of the car.

"Wow!!!" Bola went as she stared at the mansion in front of them.It was inarguably the size of a football field.

It was like staring at a live page of a "Luxury homes"catalogue.

As they  stepped out of Habiba's Range Rover SVR,Bola was awestruck not just by the size of the Mansion, but the sheer enormity of the land on which it was built.

"You c-c-could easily Fit a golf c-c-course in this place"Peter said as he shut the back seat door.

Christian stepped out of his old beat up car,as his girlfriend Eva, stepped out from the passenger side.

She seemed a little upset.

"Wow!"Christian said under his breath.

".....It's amazing what stolen money can buy"

"Don't start this again,.."Eva said keeping her voice low.

"...We're here to have a good  time,can we at least just act like it?"She said making certain their friends couldn't hear them.

"What's that supposed to mean?"He said taking a menacing step towards her.His tone was low,but the look in his eyes was one she'd come to recognise in their Two year relationship.

"H-h-how much do you think a place like this c-c-cost?"She heard Peter say to someone as Christian towered over her.

"Are you guys okay?"Victor asked coming out from the passenger side of the Range Rover.

Long pause.

Eva could feel the night air against her naked arms as Christian continued his dark stare.

If she so much as uttered a word right now,he would....

"Hey guys,"Came Victor's  hand on  Christian's shoulder.

"Are you guys good?" As he regarded them with his strikingly handsome face.

Long Pause.

"We're fine"Christian said with a forced smile.

Eva breathed a sigh of relief.She really wasn't looking forward to another black eye.

"There you are" came Habiba as she wrapped her arms around Victor.

"I'm sorry Gorgeous..."Victor said flirtatiously.

"....Was I gone for long?"

"Two seconds away from you is too long"Habiba said softly as her lips found his in an intensely passionate kiss.

Christian shot Eva a stare that said, "I'll deal with you Later".

She shuddered at the thought.

Bola made a loud sigh as she watched the kissing couple.

"...sometimes,it feels like they are showing off"She said keeping her voice low.

"K-k-kissing is a private affair...p-people shouldn't k-k-kiss in public"Peter said as he eyed the couple.

Habiba and Victor seemed lost in their kiss.

"...coming from a guy who only kisses his girlfriend during sex,I believe you" Bola said simply.

"..P-p-please,stop c-co-comparing our relationship to theirs.We k-k-kiss when necessary" He declared in a somewhat indignant tone.

Long pause.

"You call this a relationship?"Bola said softly as she walked away,leaving Peter with a slightly dumbfounded look on his face.

"Love Birds!!!" Bola called out.

Habiba and Victor reluctantly ended their kiss but still held on to each other.

"...what?"Habiba said with eyes glazed with desire.

"...sorry to break up this 'heated-link',but some of us need to be indoors,......away from the night's chill" Bola said the last part with a mild stare in Peter's direction.

Eva had gotten her jacket from the car and was wrapping herself up.

Christian lit a cigarette and sucked some smoke into his lungs.

Habiba threw him a distasteful stare.
"What?"He said defensively.

"...I'm cold"

Habiba rolled her eyes and said,
"....let's go .....and no smoking inside  Christian,....I mean it"

"Whatever you say.....boss"He said taking another drag from the cigarette.

"We have the place all to ourselves this weekend guys"Habiba said as she led them into the Lavish and spacious living room.

"It's very clean," Bola said as she ran her fingers through the sides of a cabinet checking for dust.

"Yea,it is...."Habiba replied receiving a playful shove from Victor.

"......about nine maids and a handyman come by every morning to touch up the place"

"Nine maids???"Christian said picking up  a gold Vase from the cabinet and weighing it with his hands.

"Careful with that...."Habiba called out.

"...it was a gift from an Arabian Sheik...it cost a fortune"

"....hmmmm,where I come from,they don't trust maids with stuff like this just lying about"Christian said placing the ornament back.

"...Where you come from,they don't HAVE maids"Habiba responded evenly.

Long pause.

"Bae,be nice...."Came Victor placing a hand on her shoulder.

"...he is our guest..."

"..No, I'm HER guest,..you don't live here...remember?"Eva instantly recognized the dark tone in her boyfriend's voice again.

This could get ugly she thought.

Long silence.

"Em....hey!...Is that a snake?"Bola said excitedly as she made across the spacious room.

Victor and Christian stared at each other for a few more seconds.

Bola stared in awe at the beautiful large glass case, and the shiny contents. Not the snake ofcourse

"Oh!That's Bruno..."my Dad got him on his last trip from Australia.He's an Inland Tipan"

"A what?"Bola asked slightly dumb founded as Peter and Eva joined her to stare at the large Reptile.

"...An Inland Ti..."

"Inland taipan....."Christian interjected,as he walked towards the glass case.

".....Oxyuranus microlepidotus commonly refered to as the Fierce Snake'......"

"You know a lot about snakes?"Habiba asked staring at him skeptically.

"...you could say that,..yes"

"Hmm..."went Habiba as she arched an eye brow at her boyfriend.

"...He only watches Wild-life Channels".Eva said over her shoulder.

"Is it Dangerous?"Bola asked staring at  body of the serpent and wondering why they had to put shiny and obviously expensive ornaments inside the glass case.

"It's considered the most venomous snake in the world; its venom is specially adapted to kill warm-blooded animals....."Christian said with a evil grin.

Bola felt a shudder run through her.

"..... there's enough venom in a single  bite to kill at least 100 fully grown men"he concluded.

"Jesus!!!"Bola heard her own voice say.

Long silence.

The snake suddenly launched itself at her with lightening speed,slamming it's deadly  fangs against the glass with a loud thud.

Peter, Bola and Eva jumped backwards in terror as Bola let out a sharp scream.

Christian broke into a series of chuckles.

"Calm down you guys,Bruno is harmless..."Habiba said with a smile.

".....That's  Six inches of reinforced glass.Unless Bruno's on steroids,he  couldn't possibly crack it"

Bola didn't seem convinced.

"I'm not staying in the same....time zone with that thing"she pointed.

"Just relax dear"Habiba said reassuredly.

"....Let me show you to your rooms"

Bola and Peter kept on staring at the..."thing" inside the glass case.

"....My dad has a "handler" who comes in twice a week to feed him"

"F-f-feed him what..???"Peter asked in a frightened voice.

"....oh,rats,birds...my dad loves this sort of stuff.You should see his tiger collection at the back of the house"Habiba said excitedly.

"W-w-what's that??"Peter pointed fearfully at lever on the side of the glass.

"...oh!...that's for the Handler...don't touch that.Unless you want a loose snake on your hands."

Long Silence.

"Are the rumours true about the steel shutters ...?"Eva asked.

"Steel shutters?....what s-s-steel shutters?"Peter asked curiously.

Habiba suddenly had a delightful grin on her face.

"Come..I'll show you"

Habiba and Victor took them up the stairs,through a brightly lit corridor to a gold plaited door, making out and chuckling.

Bola and Eva walked behind the kissing Habiba and Victor.

"... Show Offs"came Eva's whisper.

"....What Do you think he sees in her?"Bola asked   Eva.

Eva cautiously looked over her shoulder at Christian and Peter.They didn't seem to be listening.

"...love, I guess...and besides they're both rich"Eva said.

"Hmmm..."Bola went thoughtfully.

"...are the rumours  of his bankruptcy true?"Eva asked bringing her voice even lower.

"Shh!!"Bola hushed instantly as Habiba turned around.

"Wait until you guys see this!!!"Habiba said delightfully.

She opened the door into a room that looked like something out of a drug Cartel boss' lounge.

"Woah!"Christian went as he stepped into the room.

"Wait till you see this, guys,"Habiba rushed to the side of the bed and pressed a button on what looked like a Solid Gold stool.

Instantly,there was a light humming sound in the room.

Outside the house,Steel shutters slowly sealed all the windows and doors.

Inside the house, Habiba was grinning like a child.

" we are sealed behind  Five Inches of reinforced steel."She said.

Her friends watched in awe..

"Really???" Eva asked.

"Yea .... the shutters are deactivated by a voice recognition software....here watch....(clears throat)....SHUTTERS OPEN!!!"

Once again,there was a light humming sound.

Outside,the steel shutters slowly opened again.

"..... my dad had them installed after the 'Stolen Diamonds controversy'...."Habiba uttered the last words softly as if suddenly conscious of what she was saying.

"Anyway,.... I think we've had enough excitement for one night.....let me take you to your rooms"Habiba concluded.




"And this is YOUR room"Habiba said opening the door for Bola and Peter.

"Wow!It's bigger than the other two"Bola said excitedly.

"Of course it is....I saved the best for my  child-hood friend and her boo"Habiba said proudly.

As Bola and Peter surveyed their room,Habiba had Victor's arms around her body.

"....Em...Bola"

"Yes dear" she replied as Peter put their bags down.

"...could you..maybe make me one of those your delicious fresh fish pepper soup bowls.....please???"

Bola rolled her eyes.

She knew Habiba wouldn't take No for an answer.

"okay dear....like right now?"

Habiba eyed Victor mischievously,

"....ingredients are ...in the kitchen.....maybe in about one.......or two hours....me and Victor have some catching up to do" she giggled.

After a few minutes of just hanging around,Habiba and Victor retired to their room.

"Goodnight, guys...."Habiba yelled.

ABOUT TWO HOURS LATER, Victor rolled off Habiba's naked body with an exhausted sigh and  falls into the pillow next to her.

Both  were out of  breath as they stared at the ceiling.

"We are so doing that again" Habiba gasped.





BOLA slowly approached the  door with two hot bowls of pepper soup.

She hated these "mid-night favors". She had BIG plans for the weekend.

Earlier,She'd heard that weird  humming sound again.Were those two activating the shutters again?she'd wondered.

She knocked on the door.

There was silence from inside.

"Habiba!!!"She called out.

No answer.

Odd.

The door was slightly ajar.

Then she heard a loud frantic banging sound coming from inside.

She pushed the door and stepped inside.

The rest of the house was deathly still.

Long silence.

Then the screams began.




EVA heard the screams and came out of the room.

Some time in the night, Christian must have stepped out for a smoke.She thought as she raced to the master's bedroom.

Peter was already at the door of the Master bedroom.

The door was wide open and she could see Peter standing inside with a shocked look on his face.

She could hear a strange banging sound coming from inside the room.

"What's going on??....I heard screams."she said but  Peter didn't seem to have heard her.He looked dazed.

"What's going on?" came Christian's voice from behind her.

She could smell the stench of nicotine on his breath.

They entered the room.

The sight before them was unreal.

Broken bowl fragments littered the floor.

Bola was kneeling by the bed, her  screams had become loud whimpers as her entire body trembled.

The loud banging continued.But no one seemed to notice.All eyes were on the blood soaked sheets and Habiba's naked limp body lying on the bed with the dark crimson fluid still oozing from her throat.

"J-Jesus"Peter said.

More banging.

"What happened?"Eva said in a small voice.

"I....I don't know...I came in.with...the soup....and found (sniff) ...her like this"

"Where's Victor?"Christian asked calmly.

"I..I don't......"

"What's going on??Open the door Habiba"Came Victor's voice from the bathroom door.

All eyes turned in that direction as Christian made for the door.

"Victor!!!"He called out

Long pause.

"Christian?....what are you doing in....I heard screams...what's going on.?.....Habiba locked me in....Open the damn door!!!"Victor sounded frantic ....and scared.

"The key isn't on the door...I can't ...."The Christian caught a glimpse of something shiny on the ground.

He reached for it and tried it on the door.

Victor emerged from the bathroom with a disheveled look on his face.

Long silence.

His eyes scanned the faces of everyone in the room,....then it his gaze fell on Habiba's body.

"Oh my God!!...My baby"

Victor seemed oblivious to the fact that all he had on,was a towel.

"No....no ....no..."he kept on saying as he went to the bed and took  the still naked girl in his arms.

Bola had her face in her hands as she continued sobbing.Peter had his hands on her shoulders.

Christian threw Eva a curious look.

"Did anyone hear the shutters go down?"Christian whispered.

Whimpering continued

"I-I-I heard humming earlier"traumatized Peter managed to say.

"Because if the shutters are down and......."Christian began but he never finished the sentence.


"Which of you did this????" came Victor's hateful hiss .

"Which of you killed Habiba??"

.....to be continued.

LIFE IS A CHOICE MY FRIEND
SO CHOOSE WISELY
ENOUGH SAID

57 comments:

  1. It was quite tiring refreshing always but this is kinda worth the wait. My money's on Christian!

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    1. Struggled to follow this. My guess is Victor.
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    2. Peter, Christian, Victor. Christian is prone to violence though and victor is in need of money but unless he's her husband which he isn't and obviously not her next of Kin, killing her b4 marrying her would profit him nothing. It could be a crime of passion for some reason Christian really hates Victors guts maybe he had a roll in thé hay with Habiba of blessed memory. As for Peter, he seems disturbed.

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  2. Hahaha. Lol. The fact that Habiba is my name is both worrying and flattering. Anyways as usual Hi! If you enjoy reading contemporary romance, please visit this site http://amhabyba.wordpress.com thanks very much

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  3. Why did Habiba have to die?? Choi Opus. God is watching in 3D. Hian!

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  4. Noy money is on Victor. Opus please hurry! My blood dikwa very hot!

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  5. We too are watching in 3D

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  6. Victor is the killer i guess! Too many characters at the same time! a bit hard to know who is who for now, let me go and get my own 3D to watch it more clearer.

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    1. Yep. I had a hard time keeping up with the names too and which one belonged to whom. Lool. I suspect Christian sha.

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    2. It will be too easy, it isn't Christian.

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  7. Usu its the person u least expect so i say it either peter or eva

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  8. So many characters, i'm dizzy. Gotta read it again. Brb

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    1. Hey fam.
      Christian is the Opuwari here. His motive might have been Habiba's condescending attitude towards him.
      Victor's motive might be wealth. He may be a gold-digger.

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  9. Could be habiba herself.....or peter.......christian seems like d obvious culprit..so am striking him

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    1. I think suicide is out of it!

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    2. Nah it can't be suicide. The hissing sound means something. Maybe one of the wild animals. I think we are about to read something very horrific in the next part.

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    3. Lool. Keep calm. It was Victor that hissed.

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  10. Hmmmm... There s no freaking way am staying in that house with those creatures if I see myself in such situation. I will so convince boo for us to go. And if he does not agree, ama walk away as fast as I can. Wdaf? Can't wait to read the next episode.

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  11. I get scared very fast. Makes my body shake. Can't embark on dangerous adventures in the name of fun.

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  12. Am suspecting that Christian opened that snake glass but that's who everybody is suspecting so he might be innocent. My money is on wild animals, who released em is what I don't know.

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  13. The snake killed habiba but it was released by one of them

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  14. It should be btw Christian and Eva. it can't be Victor bc someone locked him inside d bathroom, n an animal cannot lock a door, so someone killed her. Its either Eva or Christian bc Eva had been jealous of Habiba, Infact it's complicated. Good job Opus. Can't wait for d second part.

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  15. If only Opus will release us from this bondage of his on time, at least one story in a week it will do a great magic! Some people are starting from the center of the stories forgotten by others. Mine humble opinion though!

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    1. Lol.
      It doesn't work that way.
      Writing is an art & once a certain inspiration emerges, d writer goes with the flow.
      It can't be forced.
      Most times, Opus has no idea where the stories are headed. He spins them as the spirit leads. I love you, Opus bae.

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    2. Then neither Achebe nor Adichie would have completed a single story!

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    3. Hahahaha. Sadly, this is neither Achebe nor Adichie. *tongue click*
      Easy on Opus he's got a lot to deal with as it is. This blog is a past-time for him IMO. No pressure.
      Anon's retort still got me in stitches tho. Looooool.

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  16. My money is on the next episode... I love Opus

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  17. I'm suspecting one of the girls or Peter. It can't be Victor cos according to Eva he is bankrupt so he needs Habiba alive and Christian has already been painted as a culprit so it's definitely not him. My bet is between Eva, Bola and Peter cos one of them may have a hidden agenda to murder Habiba. Second Guess, this maybe a Conspiracy Theory whereby Habiba is alive and she and Victor planned this whole shit... Just a guess though.

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    1. Alive and gushing out blood? i don't agree to that!

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  18. My money is on the fuel that I'll use to charge my phone, so I'll re-read this again. Interesting one as always.

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  19. Expect the unexpected.....

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  20. Hmmmm. Thinking! Let me think for a while and come back to this.

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  21. A lot of angles. Bola heard d humming sound of the shutters before entering, so it may be from outside. Probably not Christian. But I don't trust Victor too just cos he was locked in the bathroom. its possible he locked himself in and slide d key out through the tiny space at d bottom of the bathroom door. that's y Christian found it on d floor. all in all, Opus, ure the best

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  22. Last last, the culprit will be someone (or something) we didn't expect.

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  23. hmmm. darl is at it as usual. well.. well.. well.. who did it??? questions to be answered.

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  24. This is what I call a proper whodunnit', CSI and discoveryID have got nothing on you Opus.

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    1. Oh @ Neeky you make me know the real topic of discussion now! who did this? tanx jare.

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  25. Wow I see I have missed a lot. Been really busy. hmmm Considering the writer here, it could be anybody and everybody. B.T.W, tnx Opus for your help with our script. we have strted casting, been a hectic and crazy schedule.

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  26. Will have my suspect when I read pt 2 cus at this point it could be anybody. Great story bro

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  27. The ending had me gaspin for breath...couldn't keep up with the names though...I got rily scared cos I hate snakes with passion...
    Welldone Opus...hoping the next part satisfies my curiosity..

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  28. The ending had me gaspin for breath...couldn't keep up with the names though...I got rily scared cos I hate snakes with passion...
    Welldone Opus...hoping the next part satisfies my curiosity..

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  29. Hmmn see twist abeg. With habiba in no condition to talk n a 5" reinforced steel shutter,my guess is there will be no survivor. Opus bae, You too much sha.

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  30. Killler has not been added to the story yet. Opus and His Mind. Again I duff My hat for You

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  31. Opus has bn really bizi.i hv bn refreshing 4 more stories 4 abt 5days now.please upload more...love u too much

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  32. Opus has bn really bizi.i hv bn refreshing 4 more stories 4 abt 5days now.please upload more...love u too much

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    1. Opus Haba! This waiting feels like I'm waiting for d second coming. U'll na come and apologise again. Dis isn't fair o. Diariz God.

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  33. Nice one...opus Oya nau I've been waiting fr the next prt

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  34. Nice one...opus Oya nau I've been waiting fr the next prt

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  35. Do they actually have the house all to themselves this weekend? My guess is no, either someone is there with them came before them or after them.

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  36. It cud be Eva.... She sounded so jealous...

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  37. hmm... let's just say the writer killed Habiba...but then again, i'd say it's the handler who tracked them. he's the only one that can handle the snake so he released it and is somewhere just watching...waiting...tapping...watching...

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  38. he must have had an issue with Habiba's dad and thought to get back his own pound of flesh...some dark eyes lurking in the shadows in that creepy animal home of a mansion...

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